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clh3785
21st-July-2008, 09:43 PM
This ones around 3 years old now, but still one of my favorites. Again, any opinions (Good or Bad) would be greatly appreciated.


Packing my bags, and saying my goodbyes.
I'm leaving this town and never looking back.
Coming with me, is the best mistake you could ever make.
So lets run from here, and we will last forever.
We will go to a place where life is of little importance.
And love is the only thing we were made to remember,
Remember, things are the most beautiful before you die.
I think I've been dying since i met you.

So close your eyes, and take my hand.
Have faith for i will not leave your side.
We run with coat-tails flapping in the wind.
Don't bother, for i will keep you warm.
This is the first time i can say.
I am not afraid.
So bring on the villains and bring on the torches.
Being burned alive, is nothing compared to how i burn for you.
So bring on the sick sadistics.
I am fine as long as i have you.

mabrymusic
22nd-July-2008, 12:46 AM
yah, this one is good

soulpimp
12th-November-2008, 02:44 AM
pretty good dude

Kenshi
5th-December-2008, 03:19 AM
nice, i like it. especially the line Remember, things are the most beautiful before you die.I think I've been dying since i met you.

what literary techniques do you normally add into your poetry?, because i noticed there was no rhyme scheme here.

clh3785
8th-December-2008, 11:35 PM
some of my stuff rhymes some doesnt
the stuff that rhymes has a diffferent scheme.
really depends on my mood.